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You're crushing my dreams
This is really the way it seems.
And as I sit here
with tears rolling down my cheeks,
fighting the urge to cry,
holding it all in like always,
because I don't want you to see my weakness,
I realize how much you're bringing me down.
Really pushing me to the ground
When, finally, I summon up the courage
to tell you my plans and hopes,
you bind them in ropes
and suffocate them
like you're suffocating me.
Let me breathe
Let me breathe without being afraid
of your words and voice that scares me,
the voice that has scared me my entire life.
You're supposed to be my dad
You're supposed to be the one guy,
in the whole entire world,
that would never break my heart.
But you've done it a thousand times.
I'm tired of craving your approval, your blessing,
the admiration that you once had
of this now young woman
that was once your little girl.
I want to break those chains,
I'm still that same girl, but you've changed.
I'm tired of fighting you,
tired of trying to make you proud,
just to feel you push me down
Just let me go,
Let me dream,
Let me be happy
You're suffocating me
and you're eventually going to drown me
Let me breathe.
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My first lit submission (and my 600th deviation!!).... I wrote it in the moment.. took about 4 minutes... the emotions were really raw and real and I wasn't trying to create something... I just thought it would be therapeutic. I don't ever write and I don't know how to write poetry [edit: properly] so excuse my errors ^^;



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:iconnikole2029:
Describes my story in a nutshell : '( every word says it all my life.
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~lichtschrijver Apr 10, 2013  Professional Photographer
maybe he has a toff time seeing his little girl turning into a young woman.....it's hard for a dad seeing his little girl grow up so fast, it's hard to let someone go.....
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*BritLawrence Apr 10, 2013   Photographer
idk, i feel more like a burden to him than anything.. :/
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~lichtschrijver Apr 10, 2013  Professional Photographer
idk? well I dont know your dad, but I know a few other ones and they have a lot of problems of accepting that their little girls are growing up.....and daddy is not their hero anymore...
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~Viidith22 Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is incredible. Beautiful. I would be honored if you could take the time to read at least one poem of mine. I would deeply appreciate it.
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:iconlaffinia:
This is sooo relatable to me, just with the other parent. The best poems are produced in the moment, nothing but raw emotions, I can personally testify. <3
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Mood: Love !MarcusL76 Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Fantastically beautiful!! :)
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*BritLawrence Jul 23, 2012   Photographer
thank you (:
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!MarcusL76 Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're always welcome. :) :)
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~jlb462606 Jun 27, 2012  Professional Artist
Might as well get the first cry out early. Excellent poem !!!
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